Searching for some honest contstrucive feedback
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Posted:Mar 2, 2013 2:37 pm
Last Updated:Jul 24, 2013 3:51 pm
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Ok so I have been playing around with the idea of self publishing some (i guess it would be a collection or anthology) of some of my stories/poetry whatever you want to call it.
All my watchers have all been so sweet and nice and always been so supportive and some have even encouraged me to publish. Am looking for some honest feedback as well as any tips thoughts or suggestion.
If anyone else has self published I would luv to hear about their experience pointers etc.
Also been thinking about using a pen name.
I like the name Mattox as a first name it's different but not to far from mainstream. The last name I have been a little stuck on. I have been leaning towards Sparks or Woods. ( I want kind of a fire motif)
Love to hear what everyone thinks thank you so much in advance.
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In the shadow of the lighthouse
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Posted:Jan 22, 2013 9:51 pm
Last Updated:Nov 20, 2016 3:48 am
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They walked along
the rocky shoreline
in the shadow of the lighthouse.
That place
where they had just shared
an encounter
so hot and wild
it begged to be told,
yet it was her story to tell.
He was so very smitten
so very much in lust
in awe of her.
Of all the fantasies
he had of her
he never once thought
they would come to pass.
But wow what an afternoon
it had truly been.
He looks over at her
and smiles.
So beautiful so sexy.
He took her by the hand
just so he could
reestablish contact
a connection with her.
Being close to her
but not touching her
seemed like a crime.
The walked down the beach
hand in hand
as they explored
the tidal pools
various debris
and just enjoy the fresh ocean air.
Taking in the beauty of the coastline.
Laughing, talking
just enjoying
the time they had together
as they spotted the different marine life
that resides in the bay.
The coastline across the bay
providing a beautiful backdrop
to the vision
he was walking with.
She always felt he put her
upon a pedestal,
he knew she had flaws
but it was her flaws that made her
all the more amazing.
That and she could wrap him
around her finger without trying.
The found a secluded grassy spot
above the tidal line
and he laid out a blanket.
They continued to talk
and flirt
and just be
for what seemed like
a glorious lifetime.
He could hold back
the urge anymore.
Usually shy
but with her it was effortless.
He kissed her lips
he missed the feeling
and her sweet taste.
The quickly found themselves
touching,
caressing,
lost in each others embrace.
Their hands
finding the most intimate
of places
as they teased,
stroked,
rubbed,
fondled
and explored each other
until the sound of the squawking seagulls
were drowned out
from existence
by their lust filled passion
for each other.
Their lips locked and
their tongues
tasting one another.
She pulled down
the top of her sundress
as she straddled him.
He could help but gasped
as he looked up at her
seeing the cotton candy sky
of the approaching sunset behind her.
The red, yellow, orange, and purple streaks
flowing in the west
as darkened blue
slowly creeps across from the east.
There never
a more beautiful
perfect moment
as he got lost in her beauty.
All while his body raged
with an inferno
at the pleasure of feeling himself
being eased inside her.
Watching her
find her pace
her rhythm
her desired depth.
Seeing her in all her glory.
Mesmerized
watching her breasts bounce
with each stroke
down onto him.
Her head back
her hair flowing down
like fire.
The summer air
clings to her
causing her body to seem to shine
shimmer and sparkle
like the subsiding ocean waves
reflecting the fading light.
He rocked and thrust
to match and meet her movements.
She reached behind
and placed her hands
upon his legs
using his strength as leverage.
Feeling the curve of his shaft
move to just the spot
she wanted it
where she needs him.
Hitting her just right
each and every time
she takes him deep inside.
Riding him in unison
to the soft sounds
of the tide caressing the shore.
All the beauty around them.
Yet she is the only beauty
he can see.
watching her move
as she ride up and down.
Feelings her juices coat him
as her body clenches
and grips him with every move.
It should have been
a raw crude sight to see
but watching her move
seeing her slide down the length of him
taking him in
seeing himself disappear inside her
was beautiful beyond words.
Her curves
were natural,
endless,
perfectly flawed
and exquisite.
He could help
but to moan her name
as he felt her wash over him
time and time again.
Reaching up
he grasped
both of her ample breasts
feeling them mold
to his hands
to his touch
filling his hands completely.
His soft firm hands
gently squeezing them
simply because
he couldn't resist the urge
not to.
He melted
as she softly moaned
at his touch.
she slide her hands
up her curvaceous body
till her hands covered his
pressing his hands
full against her breasts.
Flattening her breasts
between his hands
and her.
Her hands caressing
urging
almost commanding his hands
to massage
and fondle her.
Squeezing her breasts
adoring her pure sexy form.
It felt like the atmosphere
would ignite
from the heat and electricity
they both felt.
He leaned forward
pulling one of her hardened nipples
into his ravenous mouth.
His hand squeezing her breast
as he sucked
trying to make her gasp
or moan,
by sucking that reaction
from deep within her
from deep inside
her divine soul.
Her fingers
raked their way
through his hair
as she clasped
the back of his head
pressing him closer
urging him to feast upon her
as she continued to slide
up and down him
feeling her juices spill out onto him
as she felt him
hit deep within her.
Their bodies colliding
undulating as one
like the boats on the bay.
He felt her hand clench
into a fist
within his hair
he could feel her body
tighten around him
as she continue to bounce
up and down upon him
the heat was oppressive
but oh so decadent
as it balanced the dropping temperature.
His arms wrapped around her
holding her close
as he could sense
the tidal wave within her building.
He struggled to maintain control
feeling her heat
coated in her nectar
watching her move
tasting her passion.
She gripped him
She held on.
she cried out his name
he felt her
slam down on him
squeezing him tightly.
He felt her waves of passion
rush over her and flood him.
He lost control and exploded
within in
as they crested
their waves of passion together,
She collapses upon him.
His arms wrapped around her.
Holding her close
as they both struggle to breath again.
Apparently a day at the lighthouse
and the beach was a very good idea indeed.
Authors note : It's a bit raw unpolished (well even more so than normal) This entered into my mind last night and simply put it to paper then to here within 24 hours. Not as much imagery as I probably would have liked but hope its ok.
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Drizzled Passion
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Posted:Dec 29, 2012 7:51 pm
Last Updated:Feb 9, 2020 5:42 pm
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He watched her
swing her leg over him
straddling him.
He was mesmerized by her
as her hands found balance
upon his chest.
Shes slowly brushed her lips
back and forth
over the tip of his erect shaft.
He could feel her nectar
glaze the very tip of him.
She slowly descended upon him
feeling his shaft
pierce her
then split her resolve
as the force of gravity
pushed up further into her
stretching her
making her body accommodate him
regardless of intent.
His eyes didn't know where to focus
it was all beyond beautiful.
it was like trying to watch a sunset
across an entire mountain range
with only one eye.
There was to much to see and enjoy.
she raised herself up and back down upon him
her palms almost clenching his chest.
Her desire controlled everything.
Yet there was no stopping how much
he filled her
once she took him completely in.
He watched as her mouth opened and closed with moans
as she rocked and raised up and down
upon his swollen passion.
He watched as her breasts
gently swayed closer
and further away
accentuated by that sexy bounce
that inertia and momentum
played upon them
How hardened her nipples became
calling out to him
to pull into his mouth
as they remained tauntingly
just out of reach.
He watched as her back arched and moved
controlled by her uncontrollable
wanton desire.
His eyes captured
how here eyes closed
and opened
as each wave of sexual chemistry
washed over her
like waves upon the ocean shore.
How her mouth opened
when he was completely immersed
inside her.
like the spirit of his desire
extended from the tip of his rounded head
up through her
running the length of her spine
she had to open her mouth
just to be able to breath.
He watched as her hair
danced like the fading flames
of winters fire.
He watched those sexy thighs
pin him
hold him
subdue him
control his pleasure
as they trapped him
and moved
like the pistons of a steam locomotive
churning the power and intensity
of their bliss.
He watched enthralled
at the sight
of his disappearing inside her
over and over and over and over again.
He watched as her sweet nectar
rolled down
coating his shaft
like melted caramel
over a candied apple
or hot fudge
sliding down a scoop of ice cream.
It was her motion
her hips
the depths of her passion
her need to be filled by him
her want to bathe him in her
that kept this moment unforgettable.
His arms and hands limited in movement
due to the position of her hands.
He slide his hand up
holding her cheek
and said what he knew
would work for her.
A soft tender "Baby"
caressed her ears
like his fingertips did her face.
As she continued to move rhythmically
up and down the length
and curve of his shaft
when she opened her eyes
to look at him.
His tone changed.
His fingers applied firm
yet controlled pressure
to the back of her head.
He commanded.
"Fuck me baby".
That was all it took.
She nearly bruised his lips
as she kissed him
with reckless abandon.
Lips parted
tongues dancing like Olympic fencers.
Her body no longer responded
to what ever thoughts
her mind could conjure.
She started slamming
grinding and
uncontrollably riding him
The sounds of the colliding pelvises
his his cock
seemed to pinball inside her
as she continued to grind
like a millers stone
to the autumn harvest.
she could feel his balls trapped in the movement
following her ass
as she rocked back and forth.
Her hand now pinning him down
by the joint of his shoulders.
She could feel the tension
with in herself
within him.
He couldn't watch anymore.
He could only groan and fight for control
she cried out
and began spasming around him
soaking him
and he lost control
and she felt him lurch inside her
and felt the heat of his release
pump into her
over and over like an erupting volcano.
She collapsed upon him
as she felt the last few aftershock
fade from between her thighs.
They panted trying to find
what breath they could.
she could feel their juices mixing.
filled within her
as they drizzled down his semi hard shaft
over his balls
and coating both their thighs.
Authors notes : tried to run a lil bit of a progression if you will. A few of the stories i have written (yet have yet to type) have been a bit more towards the alpha side so i started wanting to write something with a softer side and decided it would be more realistic to show the evolution of passion and sometimes cause the devolution of romance (highlighted with more imagery or at least similes lol into more more analytical descriptive nature) and turn the want into a hunger. Don't know how well I did but that was the intent. Hope you enjoyed 
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